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Il était une fois… Rita
(4ème partie)
Un roman de Mounira Fehri
Traduit vers l’anglais par Walid Akermi
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Il était une fois… Rita
(4ème partie)
Un roman de Mounira Fehri
Traduit vers l’anglais par Walid Akermi
نقل للمدونة
التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة وليد العكرمي; الساعة 10-11-2013, 20:08.
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الأستاذ المترجم القدير الرائع
وليد العكرمي
لا أجد الكلمات التي تعبر عن مدى سعادتي بهذه الترجمة الجميلة جداااا
و قد قلت لك مرة أنني أحببت الترجمة أكثر من نصي الأصلي و أعيدها الآن
فعلااا ترجمة دقيقة مميزة
شكراااا بحجم السماء أستاذي الجليل -
وهذا أول خطأ نحوي sentence order in English لمجرد أن قرأت السطر الأول فقط:
Can’t catch her breath, Rita ran to her mom, who was waiting already in theتعليق
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And the years at the university were so hard! But Rita, strong as she is, has never mentioned to her friends at the university that she has bad materials!
never: always comes before the verb
e.g. Never has she mentioned = correct
Has never mentioned = wrong
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You will touch a good salary and you will
Can the salary be touched?
وكأنك تريد أن تقول ما أن تقبضي يا ريتا راتبا جيدا حتى ... يحصل كذا أو تكون المسألة كذا نعم هي في ال future ولكن هل touch تناسب؟
من الممكن استخدام get , gain , have ولكن touch !! لا وجود لهكذا استخدام في الإنكليزية ( تستخدم الإنكليزية بأسلوب عربي ) وأغلب ترجماتك هكذا
التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة علي أحمد السنجري; الساعة 11-11-2013, 09:18.تعليق
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And to tell the truth, you are the first woman in my world, or in the whole world even!!!
?????Even what
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I’m your daughter that has never forgotten you, who is following ..
Also wrong
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It’s supper time, she went inside the restaurant of the university, ate what she found and went up right away to her room
Not equivalent translation
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she never had what to pay for a coffee! And even, none has felt that! Everyone knows that Rita doesn’t like anything that is sold at the cafeteria of the university!
Rita never had she to pay for coffee , as it was already known by her classmates, moreover , each one of them knew that Rita wouldn't like anything already was sold at the..
bad conjunction
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This afternoon, while leaving the translation courses, she felt a pinch in her heart, she doesn’t know the reasonShe thinks lots of her brothers, her mom! What are they doing right now? Have they had supper? And the books for her little brother? Did mom find out how to pay them?
Lacks of sentences order, no cohesion was obvious
التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة علي أحمد السنجري; الساعة 11-11-2013, 09:02.تعليق
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e.g. Never has she mentioned = correctالمشاركة الأصلية بواسطة علي أحمد السنجري مشاهدة المشاركة
I wanted to start with this because it's the funniest structure I ever seen in my life.
First of all, I need to teach you something about the tenses in English.
This tense is called "present perfect" . so "has" is not the verb. The verb is "has mentioned" and this form is called present perfect. In this form "never" always comes between "have" and the past participle (eg. They have never done) and what you consider as "correct" is nothing.
Plus what you think is correct "has she mentioned", I wanna tell you that is a question because it has an interrogative form (verb + subject). They taught us that in the primary school, a long time ago.
If you have anything misunderstood still, just let me know and I will explain it to you
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المشاركة الأصلية بواسطة علي أحمد السنجري مشاهدة المشاركة
Same thing to say about this bullshit
e.g. Never has she mentioned = correct
I wanted to start with this because it's the funniest structure I ever seen in my life.
First of all, I need to teach you something about the tenses in English.
This tense is called "present perfect" . so "has" is not the verb. The verb is "has mentioned" and this form is called present perfect. In this form "never" always comes between "have" and the past participle (eg. They have never done) and what you consider as "correct" is nothing.
Plus what you think is correct "has she mentioned", I wanna tell you that is a question because it has an interrogative form (verb + subject). They taught us that in the primary school, a long time ago.
If you have anything misunderstood still, just let me know and I will explain it to you
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I am not sure about your french. I don't think you know anything about French or maybe it's worse than your English. Anyway, I just translated "toucher" with "touch" and you can tell by the spelling that they have the same meaning. So I don't know why I can't use that then!!المشاركة الأصلية بواسطة علي أحمد السنجري مشاهدة المشاركة
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Your comment is not clear, what's the issue with this structure?المشاركة الأصلية بواسطة علي أحمد السنجري مشاهدة المشاركة
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And to tell the truth, you are the first woman in my world, or in the whole world even!!!المشاركة الأصلية بواسطة علي أحمد السنجري مشاهدة المشاركة
?????Even what
even can take any place in the sentence. It could be the last in the sentence and could be in the beginning.
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